2013年12月15日 星期日

Annotaion 4

        Many parents will think strict education as the only way to let children get better position in their future. However, some of them can’t even control how strict is useful and efficient. Sometimes, parents think the discipline they give is appropriate, on the other hand, in fact, is a poison to the children.
        Celine Raphael is a talented child who is good at playing the piano. However, everything changes when she is “crowded” by this title. In order to letting Celine become a professional pianist, her father starts to force Celine practice the piano day and night, even stop her to have a normal life that a child deserve. Furthermore, her father will use belt to whip her once she make mistake, or other much more terrible punishments. In the end, Celine finally stood out and fight for her liberty. She successfully make her dream come true, being a doctor instead of a pianist.
         From Celine’s biography, we can find the difference of idea and feelings between parents and children. Although Celine’s father punished Celine strictly and mercilessly, even making Celine have anorexia, he denied every charges from Celine. He impute his cruel deed to Celine’s bad-behaved. We can find that, something parents think is good for children may, in fact, hurt children most seriously. However, parents will just name this discipline a good way to let their children a wonderful future. But, do these deed really come from the truly hope for children? I don’t think so.
        Many parents will force their children to learn the instrument or dance or other accomplishments because they want their children to finish what they can’t do by themselves. Celine’s father once dream to play the piano, however, because his parents can’t afford this expenses. Instead to understand what Celine really want, he just think that Celine is good at playing the piano, so she have to develop her talent without other excuses. This projection is the biggest problem the most parents will have.
        Some parents will feel some kind of guilty when they punish their children, then they will try to give their children some consolations. However, even you pull the nail out of the wall, there’s still a mark on it. Celine’s father will embrace her in the night to get Celine’s forgiveness after he punish her. But he will go on his terrible discipline and humiliation day after day. Father want to make up their relationship by a little hug. But to Celine, her hurt can’t restore so easily.
        Celine has mentioned that her father is growing up under a harsh environment and education from his father. His father also use strict method to educate him. Although Celine’s father really get a good position in the future, his mind also become anomalistic. Is this really what his father want to give him? From her father’s childhood, we can also discover one thing. A strict education may really make your children have a better work or achievement, but their mind may also have so influence by your inappropriate treatment.
        From Celine’s biography, we can understand those who is under the education from the parents like Mother Tiger. When parents just see the good side from Mother Tiger’s book, maybe they should read this book to avoid making the mistake like Celine’s father.

Reverence:

Celine Raphael(2013)。過度教育。台北縣:寶瓶文化事業有限公司。

2 則留言:

  1. In the second paragraph, it should be "force Celine to practice."(line 3) Next line, it should be"a child deserves." In the same line, you should use past tense to describe like "Furthermore, her father even used belt to whip her once she made mistake..." In the sixth line, it should be "fought" and "made."

    In the third paragraph, it should be "imputed." And in the last sentence, it should be "deeds."

    In the forth paragraph, it should be "dreamed" and "couldn't." (line 3) And after "instead" it should be "of +V-ing" not "to +RV." Next, "think" should be "thought" and "have" should be "has." In the last line, "the most" should replaced with "most."

    Please pay attention to your grammar!

    And I think your example is very useful to support your idea. It is a real case so it makes us more convinced. But, grammar is the basic writing skill. You really should improve it!

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  2. For the second paragraph, "in order to letting" should be "in order to let". "Force Celine practice" should be "force Celine to practice" or "force Celine practicing". "Stop her to have" could be changed into "stop her from having"

    The third paragraph, "bad behaved" should be "bad behavior"

    The forth paragraph, the present tense verb should be transferred to past tense. "Instead to understand" should be "instead of understanding". "Can't do by themselves" mean that they can't do it alone. If what you meant is that the parents could not accomplish it in their lifespan, the sentence should be can't "accomplish it themselves"

    The fifth paragraph, "even" should be replaced by "even if "

    Dearie you have some grammer issues hehe :)

    Yet your example is great and to the point^ ^

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